Short versus long sentences Longer sentences can sabotage writing. The inserted information can be an interruption. This happens when the inserted information comes between the subject and the main verb. Example: John, who works in[…]
Attention span is short. Time is valuable. Your reader has infinite options of things to spend his time on, other than your story. His attention is earned and you have to fight to keep it.[…]
The basics first: “He/she said” is the basic modifier. Dialogue tells us what is said, attribution tags tell us who said it and modifiers tell us how it was said. These are the aspects we deal with here, adverbs (he said happily) are a matter for concern in a different article.
Description. Two quick questions to ask yourself to keep from swamping your narration with descriptions: